Thanks for the fav! Most kind!

thanks for the comment on my Ivy image =]

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heehee~ ur stuff is great too~!! VERY unique style~ and the details~ WOW ^^
keep it up!! ^.^

Hi, thanks for the fav on my ladybug photo! glad you like it!

it was me!!!, lol thanx fer the comment

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That was me, by the way. I have a bad habit of posting under a club name because I forget who I am signed in as .

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Hello, and a second welcome to the poetry cafe, from another one of the staffers . Good to have you.

I've been browsing through your poetry, and I must say you're very good. Wait, no. I will say pretty good. I think you've got a lot of potential (ah, the P word) that you haven't realized yet. With just a little work (that is, if you want to improve your poetry - you seem to be more of a visual artist), you could change my reaction from "ah, nice poem" to "oh my god, mental orgasm" on any given piece of yours. And I'm going to give you some tips and things I've recognized in your work to try to make you better, if you don't mind. (I do this because I care! )

Drumroll please.........

1. Show, don't Tell. Golden rule of poetry. You do too much telling. Don't tell me how you feel, don't tell me what's going on, etc. Show me.

For example:
Telling is saying, "The people were boring conformists."
Showing is something like, "The people wore gray hats and complacent grins on their faces."

That's bad, but you get the idea.

2. Experiment. I believe every poem you have is composed of fifteen lines, all broken up into five stanzas of three lines apiece. Now, don't get me wrong, I'm not bashing form. But one of the best ways to improve is to try things you've never tried before, from all styles of poetry, and then weave together the best elements of each style to give your own unique feel to a poem. It helps, trust me.

3. Pay close attention to how things sound and feel. It's important to view your work from a detached perspective, which means you should let poems rest a day or two before editing them. Come back with fresh eyes and then see how a poem sounds to you. They're never as pretty as we think they are, sadly.

Hmm. That's all I have for you, especially since you didn't ask for it and because I don't know if you even want it . But if you do, there it is. Note me if you have questions .

And again, welcome to the club, you'll love it! ...I think.

*hands you a caramel latte with whipped cream*

Welcome!